Re: what do you think of my poem?

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: : I'm posting a poem to see what people think about it. The poem is in three parts. I would like to hear back what your feelings are and what you *think* about the poem. I don't want to explain yet why I wrote this like I did, I would like to get the responses first. : : : Night Dreams : : Some of my dreams are happy, : : I dream of a family and sharing my life with my wife and children. : : When I wake, I am refreshed with renewed hope. : : I am happy and look forward to the day my dream becomes real. : : Some of my dreams are not happy, : : I dream of my death. shot. knifed. suffocated. falling to my death where I bleed on the rocks. : : I wake eyes wide open, startled, gasping for air, sweating, my heart racing. : : Terrified, remembering the dream, the experience in the dream, the pain of my dream. : : : : Day Dreams : : Some of my dreams are happy, : : I dream of a family and sharing my life with my wife and children. : : I wake eyes wide open, startled, gasping for air, sweating, my heart racing. : : Terrified, remembering the dream, the experience in the dream, the pain of my dream. : : Some of my dreams are not happy, : : I dream of my death. shot. knifed. suffocated. falling to my death where I bleed on the rocks. : : When I wake, I am refreshed with renewed hope. : : I am happy and look forward to the day my dream becomes real. : : : : Conclusion : : Which ending belongs to which beginning? Which dream is real and which is really just a dream? : : Am I wanting my earthy reward? Or do I long for an end of this dream to wake and rejoin my husband? : Paradoxes are the mark of God. In our world there is only one or the other, in reality they can both be valid. This creates schizm in many people because we are forced to choose but can't, we are unable to accept one or the other because both weigh out equally. We often end up living dual lives one on one path and one on the other... : but perhaps it doesn't need to be so. Perhaps the problem is in the framework from which we approach it. Perhaps we don't really have the decision to make. Perhaps we can choose the third option and NOT choose. Then we can resign ourselves to endure and adapt, we can be equally happy in both circumstances. "To live is Christ to die is gain" I think this speaks to the heart of the matter. If we reject the world that tells us we can't be both then we can rise above and see greater planes where worlds collide and coexist, two realities in the same place. The very same reality that allows us to be here and present with God at the same time. Perhaps the very reality that allows God to present in all places at the same time. : For me this is the only option. For I am released from fear and from the burden of my impossible choice. I no longer feel the pressure and cruelty of fate driving against me or pushing me on. I have become a river flowing seamlessly around and over all things, perfectly adaptable and nearly unstoppable. This is the essence of zen and also at the heart of Christianity. This is what has enabled people to endure unspeakable hardships and atrocities and still rise to rebuild and live on. : This is what your poem makes me think of.

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