what do you think of my poem?

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Posted by Two Feathers on July 14, 2002 at 22:59:48:

I'm posting a poem to see what people think about it. The poem is in three parts. I would like to hear back what your feelings are and what you *think* about the poem. I don't want to explain yet why I wrote this like I did, I would like to get the responses first.

Night Dreams

Some of my dreams are happy,
I dream of a family and sharing my life with my wife and children.
When I wake, I am refreshed with renewed hope.
I am happy and look forward to the day my dream becomes real.

Some of my dreams are not happy,
I dream of my death. shot. knifed. suffocated. falling to my death where I bleed on the rocks.
I wake eyes wide open, startled, gasping for air, sweating, my heart racing.
Terrified, remembering the dream, the experience in the dream, the pain of my dream.

Day Dreams

Some of my dreams are happy,
I dream of a family and sharing my life with my wife and children.
I wake eyes wide open, startled, gasping for air, sweating, my heart racing.
Terrified, remembering the dream, the experience in the dream, the pain of my dream.

Some of my dreams are not happy,
I dream of my death. shot. knifed. suffocated. falling to my death where I bleed on the rocks.
When I wake, I am refreshed with renewed hope.
I am happy and look forward to the day my dream becomes real.

Conclusion

Which ending belongs to which beginning? Which dream is real and which is really just a dream?
Am I wanting my earthy reward? Or do I long for an end of this dream to wake and rejoin my husband?

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: I'm posting a poem to see what people think about it. The poem is in three parts. I would like to hear back what your feelings are and what you *think* about the poem. I don't want to explain yet why I wrote this like I did, I would like to get the responses first. : Night Dreams : Some of my dreams are happy, : I dream of a family and sharing my life with my wife and children. : When I wake, I am refreshed with renewed hope. : I am happy and look forward to the day my dream becomes real. : Some of my dreams are not happy, : I dream of my death. shot. knifed. suffocated. falling to my death where I bleed on the rocks. : I wake eyes wide open, startled, gasping for air, sweating, my heart racing. : Terrified, remembering the dream, the experience in the dream, the pain of my dream. : : Day Dreams : Some of my dreams are happy, : I dream of a family and sharing my life with my wife and children. : I wake eyes wide open, startled, gasping for air, sweating, my heart racing. : Terrified, remembering the dream, the experience in the dream, the pain of my dream. : Some of my dreams are not happy, : I dream of my death. shot. knifed. suffocated. falling to my death where I bleed on the rocks. : When I wake, I am refreshed with renewed hope. : I am happy and look forward to the day my dream becomes real. : : Conclusion : Which ending belongs to which beginning? Which dream is real and which is really just a dream? : Am I wanting my earthy reward? Or do I long for an end of this dream to wake and rejoin my husband?

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