Re: what do you think of my poem?

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: : : I'm posting a poem to see what people think about it. The poem is in three parts. I would like to hear back what your feelings are and what you *think* about the poem. I don't want to explain yet why I wrote this like I did, I would like to get the responses first. : : : : : Night Dreams : : : Some of my dreams are happy, : : : I dream of a family and sharing my life with my wife and children. : : : When I wake, I am refreshed with renewed hope. : : : I am happy and look forward to the day my dream becomes real. : : : Some of my dreams are not happy, : : : I dream of my death. shot. knifed. suffocated. falling to my death where I bleed on the rocks. : : : I wake eyes wide open, startled, gasping for air, sweating, my heart racing. : : : Terrified, remembering the dream, the experience in the dream, the pain of my dream. : : : : : : Day Dreams : : : Some of my dreams are happy, : : : I dream of a family and sharing my life with my wife and children. : : : I wake eyes wide open, startled, gasping for air, sweating, my heart racing. : : : Terrified, remembering the dream, the experience in the dream, the pain of my dream. : : : Some of my dreams are not happy, : : : I dream of my death. shot. knifed. suffocated. falling to my death where I bleed on the rocks. : : : When I wake, I am refreshed with renewed hope. : : : I am happy and look forward to the day my dream becomes real. : : : : : : Conclusion : : : Which ending belongs to which beginning? Which dream is real and which is really just a dream? : : : Am I wanting my earthy reward? Or do I long for an end of this dream to wake and rejoin my husband? : : : I think, this just cut right to my heart, I have no idea how to tell you what i feel, I have to process this for a while. Wow. : : -kat : You wanted to know what I thought,but I don't think I can seperate my feelings from my thoughts, i can't analyze your writing but, I can tell you how I responded to it. I thought at first you could probably read my mind in some way, then I realized I never had a daydream or nightmare about being murdered. But I have wished, prayed and hoped for my own demise. For a very long time I just wanted to go home, you know in the permanent sense. Marriage was death to me, in many respects. Death to the idea of Prince Charming taking me off to his castle, death to my innocence about the way the real world is. Death to my ideals. Death to my dreams and ambitions. Having children was death also. Death to selfishness, death to my irresponsibility (in some ways). However, these deaths I do not see as bad. Obviously in some ways are very good. Terror lurks in every avenue of our lives, but so does wonder if we choose to see it that way. I missed out on much wonder during my dark days. I can't get the days back, Jesus gives me my sense of wonder back and the courage to face whatever may come. : I would get married again. I think that is an amazing thing for me to say. I really am perfectly content right now. There is no romantic interest for me at this point besides the Lord himself. This should be all I desire, and the only reward I long for....Should be. : In some ways the thought of marriage is terrifying to me. I think, If I got married again, it could be bad again. That's my nightmare. : Ever more reason to rely on God for my direction. : :

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