Re: what do you think of my poem?

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: : I'm posting a poem to see what people think about it. The poem is in three parts. I would like to hear back what your feelings are and what you *think* about the poem. I don't want to explain yet why I wrote this like I did, I would like to get the responses first. : : : Night Dreams : : Some of my dreams are happy, : : I dream of a family and sharing my life with my wife and children. : : When I wake, I am refreshed with renewed hope. : : I am happy and look forward to the day my dream becomes real. : : Some of my dreams are not happy, : : I dream of my death. shot. knifed. suffocated. falling to my death where I bleed on the rocks. : : I wake eyes wide open, startled, gasping for air, sweating, my heart racing. : : Terrified, remembering the dream, the experience in the dream, the pain of my dream. : : : : Day Dreams : : Some of my dreams are happy, : : I dream of a family and sharing my life with my wife and children. : : I wake eyes wide open, startled, gasping for air, sweating, my heart racing. : : Terrified, remembering the dream, the experience in the dream, the pain of my dream. : : Some of my dreams are not happy, : : I dream of my death. shot. knifed. suffocated. falling to my death where I bleed on the rocks. : : When I wake, I am refreshed with renewed hope. : : I am happy and look forward to the day my dream becomes real. : : : : Conclusion : : Which ending belongs to which beginning? Which dream is real and which is really just a dream? : : Am I wanting my earthy reward? Or do I long for an end of this dream to wake and rejoin my husband? : I think, this just cut right to my heart, I have no idea how to tell you what i feel, I have to process this for a while. Wow. : -kat

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